w and Me © Claudia Schlottman
I am participating in Saturday Centus for the third time. It's a great meme that you can access with the icon below. This week's prompt is:
“May I help you, miss? You look puzzled.”
“Mmmm… thank you, I’m just looking for my father. We came in together a moment ago, but he seems to have wandered off.”
Here is what I did with it.
It’s 1959. I’m eleven, and Daddy and I are at the book store. No brothers, just me. Sitting on the floor facing volumes of Nancy Drew, I lose time paging through The Secrets of the Old Clock. I look up. Where is Daddy? He will find me soon.
Today I haunt the fiction section for NIN and Proust. I look up. Where is Nancy Drew? Where is Daddy?
“May I help you, miss? You look puzzled.”
“Mmmm… thank you, I’m just looking for my father. We came in together a moment ago, but he seems to have wandered off.”
I pay, wait, books in hand.
"Oh, Daddy, there you are!”
He hugs me tight and we go for ice cream, just like always.............though he has been dead since 1955.
This story if linked to Saturday Centus. Link on the left!
5 years ago
18 comments:
Oh, wow. I like this one. A lot.
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Soooo spooky...I love it! So, do you think that our writings say a lot about ourselves? How are you at Halloween :-) peace
Ooohh... definitely spooky. I'm liking the spookiness a lot of folks are doing this week, it's great!!
Wow.. I really liked your story.. would like to hear more.
Chilling...
Am I allowed to comment, before I've even posted my own story?! I follow Jenny, but haven't participated in this yet. I chose your story to read first because I liked the title with Nancy Drew in it! I didn't find this at all "spooky". I felt more bittersweet, sad, intrigued....wanting to know more. I thought it was great! :)
oh you fooled me. Wow!
I wasn't expecting that ending! You asked if I was injured in your comment on my post - week one saw me bending to tie my shoe lace, hence helping me up from the floor! NIce work!
Gosh, you caught me out with the ending! Great!
Eerie! I like 'eerie'!
Nice job on this! I love the surprise twist at the end!
Definitely bittersweet. Nicely done.
Nicely done, love the spooky twist. It's interesting how many memory stories have been done this week. Kathy
Thanks to each of you for your comments. It's very nice to know you are all out there.
That's such a sweet sentiment - I'm sorry you didn't get to go for ice cream with your dad when you were 11.
Thanks for dropping by my place. I'm glad you enjoyed my particularly weird twist on this prompt.
thanks for reading picky and leaving it some love. i'm glad you liked the post.
Looks like a good writing practice. Stretches the mind. Enjoyed it.
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