This poem was writen by my grandaughter, Addie Duck. She is 16 years old and this is her first serious attempt at writing poetry. I think it is wonderful, naturally, but she and I would both appreciate any comments you have. She used the Saturday Centus prompt, “I’d like to teach the world to sing.........” And she stuck to the 100 words rule!
Ocean waves crashing
Autumn leaves crunching
Fierce winds blowing
Tall grass swaying
I wish I could teach the world to sing
Rain drops splashing
Weeping Willows hunching
Entangling vines sewing
Bright moons waning
I wish I could teach the world to sing
Nature’s orchestra without a director
Each contributing different tones
Lyric-less music effortlessly fills the air
Randomly concocted art
I wish I could teach the world to sing
In unison, in sync, together
Conducive to the masterpiece
No longer separated
Simultaneously beautiful
I wish someone could teach the world to sing
5 years ago
12 comments:
She did very well! I can tell you are very proud of her and you should be. Keep encouraging her to continue on.!~Ames
Really lovely, emotive poem. I am impressed. I could feel, hear, and touch this poem. Very, very good.
Claudia, do you think Addie would let me put this poem on my sidebar with a link back to your blog? This is a beautiful piece!
Blogger completely destroyed my Thursday post and I had to completely re-write it, and re-post it! If you haven't read it, please do, and if you have read it, could you please let me know if I left anything out?
Thanks!
Claudia ... your Addie did an amazing job with the prompt ... i could feel that orchestra singing ... wonderful work!
The world is just warming up, awaiting a conductor.
Beautiful poem, Addie!
Fine thinking, with the issue as ever really only being how it would apply in practice; there's great depth too, and the idea is made wonderfully haunting - for sense of the locations I think, the feel of orchestration, and maybe the directness of the voice. Understanding of that central idea is built very well indeed. For a first poem it's superb!
Exceptionally well done! Love the visual imagery and motion of the piece. Beautiful!
Stunning imagery. I'm left feeling a sense of longing and celebration, both at once. Addie has a bright future in front of her. I think we're all going to get to say, "We knew her in the beginning."
I'm so glad to have been invited to read this.
Nice job, Addie! Keep it up!!
=)
This is a masterpiece and tremendous talent shown....hope to read more from this gifted teen.
Addie. Oh my heavens. I see you take after your Grandmother in the writing talent area!
This was so visual and strong. I'm impressed with the strength and maturity of your writing.
I hope we hear more from you.
Wonderful writing.
Thank you for sharing it.
Wow ! Talent sure does run in your family...an excellent poem !!!
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